Here's what I dislike about modern comics:
Page 1, panel 1 -
Why so much detail on the hands? The important thing is the button. If he's sewing by lantern light (as shown in panel two) where are the shadows?
Page 1, panel 2 -
draw a line from the base of the lantern to the right edge of the table and extend it. THAT'S where the shadow of the table will fall. And if there's light from the fire, there's ANOTHER shadow of the table that isn't shown. It's all faked.
Page 1, panel 3 -
his back looks like he's been scourged. It's the brightest thing in the picture and probably the least important and your eye is instantly drawn to it. It's confusing and irrelevant. Plus, what's the light source? If the fire is to his right, the lantern should be between him and the coat hanging over the chair, so the coat should be pitch black.
Page 1, panel 4 -
is he going in or out? The simplest HINT of street lamp would eliminate the doubt.
Page 1, panel 5 -
ditto.
Page 1, panel 6 -
the building in the background looks more like a factory with the smokestacks than the "warehouse" it's called later in the story.
Page 1, panel 7 -
Why is his face lit from below? This makes no sense considering either the street lamps or the explosion light source. And why did he turn towards the "warehouse"? There's no sound effect and explosion hasn't happened yet.
Every time I look at a modern comic I'm floored by the detailed art and the total lack of basic storytelling concepts. I can't get past the first three pages to judge the rest of it. Details that don't matter and simple background elements missing that would help orient the reader. Lots of Photoshop and fury signifying not much in the way of comics for me.
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